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Anodyne Sea; It's finally here
Topic Started: Tuesday, 19. October 2010, 10:48 (1,176 Views)
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I don't doubt. :) I'll give your crit when I re-read it, although honestly there wasnt much to crit.
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Lol, there was a whole lot to crit. I'd like to do a second draft in a year or something :P But that would be very nice.

And yes, you are fail for not commenting. Seriously.

:P Nahh...
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Meh sorry but can't drag stuff up or some mod will scold me cause I spam too much.
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Pssht. The last page and a half has been spam. If you need to reread it, go ahead. I'm patient :)
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First post in over a year. I'm still on the first page?
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It's been a while. Maybe we have something new to say?

I've posted an edited version to fictionpress.net out of boredom. I've changed a few details and cleaned up a few plot points. Even though they're little changes, they add a lot to the story. No reviews yet, I guess the mythology section isn't too popular. In any case, fictionpress isn't nearly as cool as its sister site. You know the one.

Now that I've let this work sit for a long time, I realize it's not what I thought it was.

I've found something new in this work, and that is its utter lack of restraint. I've mentioned a few times today my improvements with restraint and these are for the better. When I reread this story, though, I had so much fun. All the ridiculous situations, the crazy set-pieces, the emotional melodrama, the interesting insights, the screwball humor that's out there, even for me. It has such a personality.

The prose is too flowery for my taste and the plot is absolutely embarrassing. If you don't know your mythology, it will make even less sense. It's not as philosophically profound as I thought it was. In the new version, I even found a chance to poke fun at Tarrent's hair fetish ;P

Since this story is still in second place in the fantasy forum, I thought I'd take this opportunity for a shameless bump.
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